So once upon a time in 2010, I wrote a little story that became Good Intentions.
As I’ve noted before on this blog, Good Intentions came up while I was writing Poor Man's Fight and got stumped on a minor bit of character development. I wanted to keep writing even though I was a bit stuck. I also wanted get unbiased critical feedback on my writing skills before I dove any further on Poor Man’s Fight, too, and, well… there was this website I’d been to many times called literotica.com where people could post stories for free to a rather wide readership.
For all its erotic content, I am to this day still unsure whether to consider Good Intentions a work of erotica in an urban fantasy setting, or if it’s an urban fantasy tale with lots of erotic content. I’d like to call it the latter. My need to make sure nobody’s shocked at the explicit content says I should probably stick with the former.
There’s no explicit sexual content in this blog post, btw. Hope that's not disappointing.
So. I hadn’t really written erotica before, but I figured, hell, I could do this. I would have to have a plot, though. It gets back to something I heard George Lucas say when I was a kid: “A special effect without a story is a pretty boring thing.” (Yes, he actually said that. Look it up if you’re jaded and full of doubt.) I generally feel the same about sexual content in any medium. I don’t want there to just be two people going at it for no reason; I want some sort of context, because I feel like that makes the whole thing better, right?
I should also note that about the only erotica I had ever read was stuff on literotica.com and a few other random bits and pieces. I did not exactly have much in the way of grounding in the genre.
The story changed dramatically from my initial plans, even over the first few chapters. I originally conceived of a much snottier, more aloof and not-remotely-fun Rachel. I envisioned a story with Alex striving to measure up to Lorelei’s standards while Lorelei, in turn, strung him along as cover while she rebuilt her personal power and mortal resource base. Lorelei would use Alex to her own ends without much care as to whether he lived or died at first, but as he survived and overcame every obstacle in spite of her expectations, she’d warm up to him. Lorelei would also use Alex as a temporary sex toy. I had no plans for a rich cast of supporting characters, or for a storyline about redemption, or for Alex to have a past even he didn’t understand (no spoilers in the comments, please!).
I had in mind a climax where the mystic bonds between Alex and Lorelei broke at some sort of prom-like thing just as Lorelei really began to feel genuine love for him, and then she’d fly off to answer the summons of her old arch-demon master with one last longing look at Alex. I saw Alex calling in his markers with Rachel to help him go rescue her.
But then I started writing chapters two and three, and I realized there was no real reason why Lorelei wouldn’t just eat his face and be done with him. That required a major course correction to make the whole thing work.
The more I thought about it, the more interesting it seemed to me that rather than being evil but susceptible to good, Lorelei was just… tired of being evil. Not looking for redemption, but knowing that her current path was empty and boring. And while I didn’t want a storyline about a bad girl changing her ways for the love of a good man—any story about one person “changing for love” makes me wince—I did like the idea that Alex represented opportunities and choices she could make to change herself.
And then Rachel went and grew a personality, too.
It also grated on me a bit that Alex, though not quite twenty years old yet, felt so much to me like an older sort whose compassion and forgiving nature came from a whole lot of mileage. He seemed to me like a guy who’d had his heart broken a lot, and sometimes deliberately and brutally… but no matter how vicious and real high school drama can be, that’s all still high school drama. I realized then that Alex had a past he didn’t understand.
I figured out, eventually, that these were three weary and lonely people with a lot of scars on the inside.
So if you’ve read this far, you are probably very interested in what happens in the sequel. I have tentatively titled it Natural Consequences. The prologue should be a big hint, of course. Aside from that, you will see:
*Alex in legitimate fear of losing his goddamn mind
*the origin of Lorelei
*the return of Diana the Werewolf
*Lorelei explains The Truth About Monsters
*a lot of very pissed off vampires
*much more of Molly and Onyx
*Alex and the guys having their shittiest Halloween ever
*Why Wade came home early from Afghanistan
*Jason trying to start a relationship that doesn’t kick off with a girl literally jumping in his lap--or, as gamers like him would call it, “playing on hard mode”
*the reason behind Alex’s long, long run of bad luck (hint: it wasn’t luck at all)
*plenty of explicit sex
*plenty of explicit violence
*and plenty of explicit Rachel (as if there’s any other way!)
So here you are: the prologue to Natural Consequences (until and unless I change the title).
“But there is no way you can perpetrate that amount of carnage and mayhem and not incur a considerable amount of paperwork.” --Nicholas Angel, Hot Fuzz
Prologue below the cut!